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The maps below show a beachfront area in australia in 1950 and today, summarise the information

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The maps below shows an area around Australian beach in 1950 comparing to nowadays. There’s so many place that were build for more than 50 years at Australian beach front area. Now, you can see that the playground have been replaced with the car park so after you arrived at the beach you don’t need to worry if the car park on the east side before the U-turn is fulfilled by passenger’s vehicle. Next up we can see at the end of the U-turn, there’s a new place located behind the light house and next to the 25m pool called surf club where you can enjoy surfing at the Australian beach. The surf club also available beside the restaurant and 50m pool. On the left and right side of the beach there’s a pool, for the west side of the beach the pool length is already upgrade from 25m to 50m. If you hungry, you can buy a food and beverages that are available at their restaurant.
The maps below
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an area around Australian
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beach
in 1950 comparing to nowadays.

There’s
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that were build for more than 50 years at Australian
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beach
front area.
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Now
, you can
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see
that the playground have
been replaced
with the car park
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so
after you arrived at the
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beach
you don’t need to worry if the car park on the east side
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before
the U-turn
is fulfilled
by passenger’s vehicle.
Next
up we can
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see
at the
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end
of the U-turn, there’s a new place located behind the light
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house
and
next
to the
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25m
pool called surf club where you can enjoy surfing at the Australian
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beach
. The surf club
also
available beside the restaurant and
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50m
pool.

On the
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left
and right side of the
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beach
there’s a pool, for the west side of the
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beach
the pool length is already upgrade from
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25m
to
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50m
. If
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you
hungry, you can
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buy
a food and beverages that are available at their restaurant.
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IELTS academic The maps below show a beachfront area in australia in 1950 and today,

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