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the table shows how to make processing frozen fish

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The given diagrams give data about the producing of frozen fish pies. Overall, it is clearly seen that the potatoes and fresh salmon were utilized for manufacturing this product, and after several activities they wrapped for freezing. With regards to, the truck delivered potatoes for cleaning almost every month, meanwhile potatoes were cleaned and pilled for slice and then this vegetable was boiled in the water. And before the wrap with fresh salmon, potatoes were chilled and stored. Despite the fact that, inside 12 hours, the vehicle delivered the salmon in order to add lemon juice and salt respectively. The next steps consist of steaming oven, removing bones and skines, inspecting and preparing pears, and finally before wrapping with potatoes, from this product sauce was prepared. After wrapping both of the products, they send to freeze and finally they stored and dispatched
The
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given
diagrams give data about the producing of frozen fish pies.

Overall
, it is
clearly
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seen
that the
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potatoes
and fresh salmon
were utilized
for manufacturing this product, and after several activities they wrapped for freezing.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
With regards to
, the truck delivered
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potatoes
for cleaning almost every month, meanwhile
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
potatoes
were cleaned
and pilled for slice and then this vegetable
was boiled
in the water. And
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before
the wrap with fresh salmon,
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potatoes
were chilled
and stored.

Despite the fact that, inside 12 hours, the vehicle delivered the salmon in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
lemon juice and salt
respectively
. The
next
steps consist of steaming oven, removing bones and
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skines
, inspecting and preparing pears, and
finally
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before
wrapping with
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potatoes
, from this product sauce
was prepared
.

After wrapping both of the products, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
to freeze and
finally
they stored and dispatched
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