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the map shows the changes to the road to access city hospital in 2007and 2010

the map shows the changes to the road to access city hospital in 2007and 2010 pKLP0
The road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010 is exhibited in the map. It can be conspicuous that in 2007, there was no any roundabout. However, in 2010, two roundabout were constructed on hospital road which directly linked to city hospital. On the both sides of hospital road, bus stops were present. In the east side of hospital road, car parking for staff as well as for public was situated. Wherews, after 2 years this particular location was used for only staff parking. Further the map reveals that public car park was shifted to the right side of ring road. In contrast, bus station was opened in 2010in the north side of hospital road. This station was connected with both roundabouts. Overall, there were number of advancements in the road access of city hospital.
The
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access to a city
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hospital
in 2007 and 2010
is exhibited
in the map.

It can be conspicuous that in 2007, there was
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no
any roundabout.
However
, in 2010, two roundabout
were constructed
on
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hospital
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road
which
directly
linked to city
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hospital
. On the both
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sides
of
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hospital
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road
, bus
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stops
were present. In the east side of
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hospital
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road
, car parking for staff
as well
as for public
was situated
.
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Wherews
, after 2 years this particular location was
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used
for
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only
staff parking.
Further
the map reveals that public car park
was shifted
to the right side of ring
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road
.
In contrast
, bus station
was opened
in 2010in the north side of
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hospital
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road
. This station
was connected
with both roundabouts.

Overall
, there were number of advancements in the
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road
access of city
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hospital
.
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IELTS academic the map shows the changes to the road to access city hospital in 2007and 2010

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