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the line graph give information about the gold sale Dubai

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The line graph illustrate the gold sale Dubai fluctuated over a period of 12 months in 2002. It was evident that the figure of gold revenue Dubai remained relatively unchanged during the time shown. Additionally, sales were at their highest in March while the weakest sales figures could be observed in July and September. For the first months of the year, gold sale stood at 200 million dirhams and rose slightly to reach about 225 million in February. This was followed by another increase, although much steeper, in March when sales were almost 125 million dirhams higher than February. However, this upward trend was suddenly broken and sale plummeted over the next 4 months to reach a little over 100 million dirhams in July. August sale showed a significant rise back to January levels as figures nearly double, but it was not last as they dropped again in September to the same level as they were in July. October experienced a minimal increase of about 100 million dirhams in sales, after which sale figures levelled off and maintain static over the last two months of 2002.
The line graph illustrate the gold
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sale
Dubai fluctuated
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over
a period of 12
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months
in 2002.

It was evident that the
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figure
of gold revenue Dubai remained
relatively
unchanged during the time shown.
Additionally
,
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sales
were at their highest in March while the weakest
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sales
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figures
could
be observed
in July and September.

For the
first
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months
of the year, gold
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sale
stood at 200
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million
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dirhams
and rose
slightly
to reach about 225
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million
in February. This
was followed
by another increase, although much steeper, in March when
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sales
were almost 125
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million
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dirhams
higher than February.
However
, this upward trend was
suddenly
broken and
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sale
plummeted
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over
the
next
4
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months
to reach a
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little
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over
100
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million
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dirhams
in July.

August
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sale
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showed
a significant rise back to January levels as
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figures
nearly
double,
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but
it was not last as they dropped again in September to the same level as they were in July. October experienced a minimal increase of about 100
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million
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dirhams
in
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sales
, after which
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sale
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figures
levelled off and maintain static
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over
the last two
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months
of 2002.
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