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The map shows the changes of American town in 1948 and 2010.

The map shows the changes of American town in 1948 and 2010. gqmx1
The given pictures illustrate the alterations which are noticed in an American town from the year of 1948 to 2010. At a fleeting glance, it is observed that on the north side of the town there was a petrol station. Following this, sone factories were built in east side. To add on, there are two bog roads in the centre of town, which went from west to east and other two roads were noticed from south to north. Furthermore, there were some residential houses on south east side. Local supermarket was located on west side, as well as there was a cannel on the same side by crossing the road from market. Taking the second picture, there were some commercial buildings constructed, not only this a airport also introduced on the east side by replacing factories. In same area the supermarket also noticed. On the west side other commercial buildings installed by replacing the location of local supermarket. Sport stadium renovated by dismissing the cannel. Moreover, petrol station and residential houses remained same as past. Overall, the location of American town was renewed by developing its particular areas during the period of sixty two years, which looks totally different after renovation.
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pictures illustrate the alterations which
are noticed
in an American
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town
from the year of 1948 to 2010. At a fleeting glance, it
is observed
that on the north side of the
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town
there was a petrol station. Following this,
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sone
factories
were built
in east side. To
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add
on, there are two bog roads in the
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centre
of
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town
, which went from west to east and other two roads
were noticed
from south to north.
Furthermore
, there were
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some
residential
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houses
on
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south east
side. Local supermarket
was located
on west side,
as well
as there was a
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cannel
on the same side by crossing the road from market. Taking the second picture, there were
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some
commercial buildings constructed, not
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only
this
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a
airport
also
introduced on the east side by replacing factories. In same area the supermarket
also
noticed. On the west side other commercial buildings installed by replacing the location of local supermarket. Sport stadium renovated by dismissing the
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cannel
.
Moreover
, petrol station and residential
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houses
remained same as past.
Overall
, the location of American
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town
was renewed
by developing its particular areas during the period of
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sixty two
years, which looks
totally
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different
after renovation.
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