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The chart below gives information about the percentage of male and female teachers in six different educational levels in the uk in 2010

The chart below gives information about the percentage of male and female teachers in six different educational levels in the uk in 2010 rb36p
The bar chart compares the proportion of male and female teachers working for six different educational stages in the the United Kingdom in 2010. Overall, there were significant differences between the number of women and men teaching in Nursery, Primary school, and University. In earlier educational levels including Pre-school and Primary one, women accounted for most number of teachers (around 98% and 96% respectively), being the highest figures shown on the chart. By contrast, these of male were 50 times fewer than the data of women. However, in university, the percentage of men ( approximately 70%) doubled that of women. Meanwhile, the figure for men teaching in college was similar to that for women, at 50%, while other ones in secondary school and private training instituted were closely aligned.
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teaching in Nursery, Primary school, and University. In earlier educational levels including
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and Primary one,
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accounted for most number of teachers (around 98% and 96%
respectively
), being the highest figures shown on the chart. By contrast, these of male were 50 times fewer than the data of
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women
.
However
, in university, the percentage of
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men
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approximately 70%) doubled that of
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women
. Meanwhile, the figure for
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men
teaching in college was similar to that for
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women
, at 50%, while other ones in secondary school and private training instituted were
closely
aligned.
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