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The map showas the Village Park, now and ten years ago. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The map showas the Village Park, now and ten years ago. 62GG
The two maps illustrate changes which have been introduced to the Village Park starting a decade ago going up until present time. Overall, it can be easily observed that the use of empty lands has started being operated by expanding in size and also bike riders have been able to stand the chance of accessing special path to do cycling around their village. 10 years back neither the car park nor the tennis court was as big in size as they are now. The former obtained only 20 cars after which it specalized in 50 in full while the latter was enlarged twice since then. To the south-west of the car park the football pitch reconstructed by a moderate expansion whereas the children's gaming area was reduced to a certain scale to include soft play area right next to it. The remaining have played a vital role in the village's development since the two Pond and a small range of woods were converted into Boating lake and Cafe respectively. Finally in ten years' time two new facilities have been added up. ( toilets in the east and Picnic area in the south-west)
The two maps illustrate
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changes
which have
been introduced
to the Village Park starting a decade ago going up until present time.

Overall
, it can be
easily
observed that the
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use
of empty lands has
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started
being operated
by expanding in size and
also
bike riders have been able to stand the chance of accessing special path to
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go cycling".
do cycling
around their village.

10 years back neither the car park nor the tennis court was as
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big in size
as they are
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now
. The former obtained
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only
20 cars after which it
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specalized
in 50 in full while the latter
was enlarged
twice since then. To the south-west of the car park the football pitch reconstructed by a moderate expansion whereas the children's gaming area was
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reduced
to a certain scale to include soft play area right
next
to it.

The remaining have played a vital role in the village's development since the two Pond and a
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small
range of woods
were converted
into Boating lake and
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Cafe
respectively
.
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Finally
in ten years' time two new facilities have been
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added
up.
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toilets in the east and Picnic area in the south-west)
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IELTS academic The map showas the Village Park, now and ten years ago.

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191 words
6.0
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