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The line chart shows how much money an individual bakery store gained every month through the disposal of their three most popular products in 2014.

The line chart shows how much money an individual bakery store gained every month through the disposal of their three most popular products in 2014. AV0w

The line chart shows how much money an individual bakery store gained every month through the disposal of their three most popular products in 2014. According to this diagram, bread has been much more profitable than buns and pies at the end of the year. In January, bread started with a value of sale about $ 80. 000, but declined right at the beginning of the year to about $ 45. 000 in March and then fluctuated between figures of $ 40. 000 and $ 65. 000. However, through an abrupt growth since August, bread ended up at the same level as at the beginning. In contrast to this development, buns started with half of the breads value ($ 40. 000) and increased steadily to $ 70. 000, where it plateaued from May until August. So during the summer month buns were the most profitable products. Finally, they fell dramatically during the autumn and December, so that they finished the year with the smallest sum ($ 30. 000). Starting with the lowest value of all items, the pies rose slowly from $ 10. 000 in January to $ 20. 000 in August. At this level they remained stable until October. Within the last two months of the period they have doubled rapidly and closed up with $ 40. 000 just ahead of the buns with a difference of $ 10. 000.

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shows
 how much money an individual bakery store gained every month through the disposal of their three most popular products in 2014. According to this diagram, bread has been much more profitable than You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdoughnutpastrybreadmuffinscone
buns
 and pies at the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of the year.

In January, bread This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
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$ 80
. 000, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 declined right at the beginning of the year to about The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$45".$45
$ 45
. 000 in March and then fluctuated between figures of The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$40".$40
$ 40
. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
000
 and The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$65".$65
$ 65
. 000. However
, through an abrupt growth since August, bread ended up at the same level as at the beginning.

In contrast
 to this development, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdoughnutpastrybreadmuffinscone
buns
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 with half of the breads value (The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$40".$40
$ 40
. 000) and increased steadily
 to The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$70".$70
$ 70
. 000, where it plateaued from May until August. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 during the summer month You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdoughnutpastrybreadmuffinscone
buns
 were the most profitable products. Finally
, they fell dramatically
 during the autumn and December, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that they finished the year with the smallest sum (The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$30".$30
$ 30
. 000).

Starting with the lowest value of all items, the pies rose slowly
 from The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$10".$10
$ 10
. 000 in January to The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$20".$20
$ 20
. 000 in August. At this level they remained stable until October. Within the last two months of the period they have doubled rapidly
 and closed up with The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$40".$40
$ 40
. 000 This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 ahead of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdoughnutpastrybreadmuffinscone
buns
 with a difference of The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: "$10".$10
$ 10
. 000. 