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The map show improvements that have been made to a university campus.

The map show improvements that have been made to a university campus. wxmEl
The maps illustrate the modification of University Campus from 2010 to the present day. Overall, the surrounding of school has been significant development with various facilities such as: art building, science building and so on. A notice thing is that the number of student accommodation has been increased in number and size. To begin with, in the center plans, the lawn and sitting area have been destroyed and there are two trees have been planted here. In addition, the teaching block has been divided into separate two buildings and innovated become high-store; in particular, the old land has been used for art building. Meanwhile, university office has been replaced by science building. Furthermore, a previous resident block south of lake has been demolished and displaced by student facilities which consists of offices, shops and so on. Besides, there are two student accommodations have been constructed at next to resident building west and location of restaurant and shops. Finally, the road system has been erected nearby of students accommodation.
The maps illustrate the modification of University Campus from 2010 to the present day.

Overall
, the surrounding of school has been significant development with various facilities such as: art
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building
, science
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building
and
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so
on. A notice thing is that the number of
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student
accommodation has
been increased
in number and size.

To
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begin
with, in the center plans, the lawn and sitting area have been
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destroyed
and there are two trees have
been planted
here.
In addition
, the teaching block has
been divided
into separate two
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buildings
and innovated become high-store;
in particular
, the
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old
land has been
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used
for art
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building
. Meanwhile, university office has
been replaced
by science
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
.
Furthermore
, a previous resident block south of lake has
been demolished
and displaced by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
facilities which consists of offices, shops and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.
Besides
, there are two
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student
accommodations have
been constructed
at
next
to resident
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building
west and location of restaurant and shops.
Finally
, the road system has
been erected
nearby of
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students
accommodation.
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