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The map illustrates that West Park Secondary School’s construction changed in 1950, 1980, and 2010.

The map illustrates that West Park Secondary School’s construction changed in 1950, 1980, and 2010. MMelQ
The map illustrates that West Park Secondary School’s construction changed in 1950, 1980, and 2010. Overall, the main road and school (main building) were not changed but there were homes and farmland replaced. According to the map of 1950 and 1980, the 3 houses had been replaced by the car park and school’s science block on the left side of the school, whereas farmland had been replaced by the sports field behind the car park and science block of the school. In terms of the map of 1980 and 2010, the sports field had been moved to the playground, it had been allocated to approximately 33% of the playground. The car park had been extended to the sports field’s former place, it had accounted for almost 33% of the map and it had been the most widely extended area of this survey.
The
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illustrates that West
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Park
Secondary
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School’s
construction
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changed
in 1950, 1980, and 2010.

Overall
, the main road and
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school
(main building) were not
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changed
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but
there were homes and farmland replaced.

According to the
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map
of 1950 and 1980, the 3
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houses
had
been replaced
by the car
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park
and
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school’s
science block on the
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left
side of the
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school
, whereas farmland had
been replaced
by the sports field behind the car
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park
and science block of the school.

In terms of the
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map
of 1980 and 2010, the sports field had been
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moved
to the playground, it had
been allocated
to approximately 33% of the playground. The car
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park
had
been extended
to the sports field’s former place, it had accounted for almost 33% of the
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map
and it had been the most
widely
extended area of this survey.
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IELTS academic The map illustrates that West Park Secondary School’s construction changed in 1950, 1980, and 2010.

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