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process of making orange juice

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The first step is that fresh oranges are delivered to the factory where they are going to be washed. After being washed, oranges are extracted. If they become fresh juice, they will be packaged then sent to shops, and if not they will be fed to animals. However, some of the fresh juice is continued delivering through refrigerator truck which can remain its freshness to be evaporated and concentrated. The juice is being canned then transported to the warehouse. It is added more water while in the factory. Finally, the products will be packaged and sent to shops for sale.

The first
 step is that fresh oranges are delivered
 to the factory where they are going to be washed
. After being washed
, oranges are extracted
. If they become fresh juice, they will be packaged
 then This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmitted
sent
 to shops, and if not they will be fed
 to animals.

However
, If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?some
some of the
 fresh juice is continued
 delivering through refrigerator truck which can remain its freshness to be evaporated
 and concentrated. The juice is being canned
 then transported to the warehouse. It is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accrued
added
 more water while in the factory. Finally
, the products will be packaged
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmitted
sent
 to shops for sale. 

IELTS academic process of making orange juice

Academic

American English

2 paragraphs

100 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

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