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the bar graph shows the average monthly rainfall in one Asia city 1950-2000

the bar graph shows the average monthly rainfall in one Asia city 1950-2000 RRpxG
The quantity of the rainfall per month in a particular Asian city from 1950 to 2000 is depicted in the given bar graph. As is presented, the average of rainfall from January to May followed the upward trend, meanwhile there was a fluctuation during the last months of the period shown. The lowest rainfall of the years fall in January with just 5 mm before it started to rise slowly to 112mm in May. The next striking feature of thí graph is the rainfall had the highest peak in September which is 188mm after it witnessed a tedious drop at June for about 81mm, then the trend has reversed in November at 58mm and dipped again to 17mm in the end of the period
The quantity of the
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rainfall
per month in a particular Asian city from 1950 to 2000
is depicted
in the
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given
bar graph. As
is presented
, the average of
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rainfall
from January to May followed the upward trend, meanwhile there was a fluctuation during the last months of the period shown. The lowest
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rainfall
of the years fall in January with
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just
5 mm
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before
it
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started
to rise
slowly
to
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112mm
in May. The
next
striking feature of
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thí
graph is the
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rainfall
had the highest peak in September which is
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188mm
after it witnessed a tedious drop at June for about
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81mm
, then the trend has reversed in November at
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58mm
and dipped again to
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17mm
in the
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end
of the
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period

IELTS academic the bar graph shows the average monthly rainfall in one Asia city 1950-2000

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