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The map depicts the development of the village of Ryemouth from 1995 to the present.

The map depicts the development of the village of Ryemouth from 1995 to the present. J30Ww
The document we are going to look at is a map that shows the development of a village called Ryemouth. This map comes from an IELTS exercise, which is an international test of English proficiency. To begin with, there have been several changes in this village over the last 25 years, the most noticeable being the increases in accommodation, the elimination of the fishing industry, and the introduction of sports facilities. In 1995, to the south of the village where the sea is, there was previously a fishing industry, with a fishing port and quite a large fish market as well. Next to this was a small café. On the other side of the road running by the sea stood a line of five shops and a hotel, while situated in the north east part of the village was farmland and a park with trees. The main housing of the village was located in the north west around a main road that runs from the coastal road, with twelve houses, four of them encircled by a smaller side-street. Turning to the present-day map, it can be seen that the fishing facilities have all gone, being replaced by four apartments, and the shops have become restaurants. The café remains, as does the hotel, though with parking facilities which it did not have before. Having been converted into a golf course, the farmland has now gone, while the forest park has been removed to make way for tennis courts. Although the old houses remain, new ones have been built, along with a new road with two new houses beside it. What we can understand from this map is that the village of Ryemouth tends to emphasize more and more tourist industry over agriculture. In conclusion, the village developed in the way of sacrificing natural environment and agricultural activities to become modern and attractive to foreigners.
The document we are going to look at is a
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the development of a
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Ryemouth
. This
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comes
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test
of English proficiency.

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begin
with, there have been several
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changes
in this
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village
over the last 25 years, the most noticeable being the increases in accommodation, the elimination of the
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fishing
industry, and the introduction of sports facilities.

In 1995, to the south of the
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village
where the sea is, there was previously a
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fishing
industry, with a
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fishing
port and quite a large fish market
as well
.
Next
to this was a
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small
café. On the other side of the
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road
running by the sea stood a line of five shops and a hotel, while situated in the
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north east
part of the
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village
was farmland and a park with trees. The main housing of the
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village
was located
in the
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north west
around a main
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road
that runs from the coastal
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road
, with twelve
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houses
, four of them encircled by a smaller side-street.

Turning to the present-day
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map
, it can be
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seen
that the
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fishing
facilities have all gone,
being replaced
by four apartments, and the shops have become restaurants. The café remains, as does the hotel, though with parking facilities which it did not have
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before
. Having
been converted
into a golf course, the farmland has
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now
gone, while the forest park has
been removed
to
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make
way for tennis courts. Although the
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old
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houses
remain, new ones have
been built
, along with a new
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road
with two new
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houses
beside it.

What we can understand from this
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is that the
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village
of
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Ryemouth
tends to emphasize more and more tourist industry over agriculture.

In conclusion
, the
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village
developed in the way of sacrificing natural environment and agricultural activities to become modern and attractive to foreigners.
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IELTS academic The map depicts the development of the village of Ryemouth from 1995 to the present.

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