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The map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010.

The map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010. jk3d
The maps illustrate the developments which took place in the town of America from 1948 to 2010. Overall, it is clear that petrol stations and residential houses have remained the same whereas supermarkets, commercial buildings, and sports stadiums were newly added. Moreover, there was an airport in 2010 instead of factories. In the west, petrol station, and the east, residential houses have remained the same. In addition, a supermarket in the north, and commercial buildings in the west and the east; moreover, a sports stadium was added by 2010. In the north, factories were demolished to make a way for the airport by 2010.
The maps illustrate the developments which took place in the town of America from 1948 to 2010.

Overall
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that petrol stations and residential
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
have remained the same whereas supermarkets, commercial buildings, and sports stadiums were
newly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
.
Moreover
, there was an airport in 2010
instead
of factories.

In the west, petrol station, and the east, residential
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
have remained the same.
In addition
, a supermarket in the north, and commercial buildings in the west and the east;
moreover
, a sports stadium was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
by 2010.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
the north, factories
were demolished
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a way for the airport by 2010.
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IELTS academic The map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
104 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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