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Some people argue that it is pointless to know about the history for people who live and work in the modern world.

Some people argue that it is pointless to know about the history for people who live and work in the modern world. N7A2
Some people argue that it is pointless to know about the history for people who live and work in the modern world. I totally disagree with this opinion, because the past can exert a significant impact on our life. One of the main reasons why I believe that the past is valuable is that historic events represent the key moments of human beings which can instruct people to observe and interpret objects from various perspectives. That is to say, people can learn from the ancestors and prevent from making the same mistakes. Take the free speech as an example, in developed countries, there is a sense of dissatisfaction among citizens who have no freedom to give a speech, resulting in running a risk of pushing people to behave destructively or to rebel. As a result, the economy would be hampered, and it would be futile to expect policital freedom or economic freedom. However, governments can learn from the history, which accomanys devastating impacts, such as the traumas in people and the dampened economy, and therefore these consequences can deter people from making aggressive acts to weaken societal stability. Furthermore, I also believe that individuals can get inspirations from the past. As people are struggling to cope with the fast-paced life, it comes as no surprise that adults may feel a sense of anxiety and depression, all of which are the factors that diminish the level of happiness. However, looking back to the past, some celebrities have been through all these stages which weaken their confidence and led them stray. Therefore, getting familiar with the stories occurred to those famous people can easily arouse emotions and resonance, inspiring people to chaise a better life. To illustrate, autobiographies are one of the most popular books, which help people derive hopes in their lives by passing on extremely handy experience. In conclusion, I disagree that the past is useless, because we can learn the mistakes from history and gain spiritual support from predecessors.
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can exert a significant impact on our life.

One of the main reasons why I believe that the
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past
is valuable is that historic
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events
represent the key moments of human beings which can instruct
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people
to observe and interpret objects from various perspectives.
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people
can learn from the ancestors and
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prevent
from making the same mistakes. Take the free speech as an example, in
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developed countries
, there is a sense of dissatisfaction among citizens who have no freedom to give a speech, resulting in running a
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risk
of pushing
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people
to behave
destructively
or to rebel.
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, the economy would
be hampered
, and it would be futile to
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,
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governments
can learn from the history, which
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people
and the dampened economy, and
therefore
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people
from making aggressive acts to weaken societal stability.

Furthermore
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also
believe that individuals can
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get
inspirations from the
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. As
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people
are struggling to cope with the
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fast
-paced life, it
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as no surprise that adults may feel a sense of anxiety and depression, all of which are the factors that diminish the level of happiness.
However
, looking back to the
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past
,
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celebrities have been through all these stages which weaken their confidence and led them stray.
Therefore
, getting familiar with the stories occurred to those
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famous
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people
can
easily
arouse emotions and resonance, inspiring
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people
to chaise a better life. To illustrate, autobiographies are one of the most popular books, which
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help
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people
derive hopes in their
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lives
by passing on
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, I disagree that the
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is useless,
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we can learn the mistakes from history and gain spiritual support from predecessors.
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IELTS academic Some people argue that it is pointless to know about the history for people who live and work in the modern world.

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