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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. pPW9
The chart provide infrormation on amount of jobless people in Australia in 2012. Overall, unemployment rate in urban areas went up significantly, on the contrary, in rural areas the proportion slumped slightly. At the end of the year 2012 the average rate of idle citizens remains almost same In the first quarter of year 2012, the percentage accounts for around 6. 5 which is the highest rate throughout the year, afterwards the proportion decline markedly and reached to lowest of the year(about 4. 5%). Then the numbers fluctuated and increase slightly in next two quarters and reach to 5%. In Urban areas, the ration accounts for about 2. 2% initially, and there was sudden rose in second quarter and reach to 4%. In third quarter the numbers significantly dropped and hit the lowest to about 2%. The percentage is substantially increased in fourth quarter and reach to peak at slightly lower than 5%.
The chart provide
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infrormation
on amount of jobless
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people
in Australia in 2012.
Overall
, unemployment rate in urban areas went up
significantly
,
on the contrary
, in rural areas the proportion slumped
slightly
. At the
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end
of the year 2012 the average rate of idle citizens remains almost
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same


In the
first
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quarter
of year 2012, the percentage accounts for around 6. 5 which is the highest rate throughout the year, afterwards the proportion decline
markedly
and reached to lowest of the year(about 4. 5%). Then the numbers fluctuated and increase
slightly
in
next
two
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quarters
and reach to 5%.

In Urban areas, the ration accounts for about 2. 2%
initially
, and there was sudden rose in second
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quarter
and reach to 4%. In third
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quarter
the numbers
significantly
dropped and hit the lowest to about 2%. The percentage is
substantially
increased in fourth
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quarter
and reach to peak at
slightly
lower than 5%.

IELTS academic The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

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