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the map below show changes in a local industrial village of england called stamdorf between 1985 and 2015

the map below show changes in a local industrial village of england called stamdorf between 1985 and 2015 8EBl
The given two maps illustrate the differences in a village called stamdorf in UK from 1985 to 2015. Overall it can be seen that after three decades this village was completely transformed. The most noticeable being the increases in industrial zone. it is apparent from the first map, there was a factory to the east of the wooden bridge. Three small roadside inns were located to the north west of the bridge while field to the opposite side of the inns. The main road went through from the south east corner to north west. the thames river ran through the village. by 2015, there have been considerable changes in housing and industrial zone. Factory was demolished and new industrial zone was built to the north of the village with two industrial staff quaters which did not have before. the housing estate 2 to the south of the bridge was added and field was shifted near the themes river and replaced with housing estate. three small inns were removed and relocated to the southwest by arlington road. there were palm trees which newly added.
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two maps illustrate the differences in a village called
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stamdorf
in UK from 1985 to 2015.

Overall
it can be
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seen
that after three decades this village was completely transformed. The most noticeable being the increases in
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industrial
zone.

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it
is apparent from the
first
map, there was a factory to the east of the wooden bridge. Three
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small
roadside inns
were located
to the
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north west
of the bridge while field to the opposite side of the inns. The main road went through from the
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south east
corner to
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north west
.
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the
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thames
river ran through the village.

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by
2015, there have been considerable
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changes
in housing and
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industrial
zone. Factory
was demolished
and new
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industrial
zone
was built
to the north of the village with two
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industrial
staff
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quaters
which did not have
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before
.
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the
housing estate 2 to the south of the bridge was
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added
and field
was shifted
near the themes river and replaced with housing estate.
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three
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small
inns
were removed
and relocated to the southwest by
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arlington
road.
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there
were palm trees which
newly
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added
.

IELTS academic the map below show changes in a local industrial village of england called stamdorf between 1985 and 2015

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183 words
6.0
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