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The linear graph depicts the information about the trend sales of gold in Dubai from January to December in 2002

The linear graph depicts the information about the trend sales of gold in Dubai from January to December in 2002 YdY6K
Overall, it is clear that the maximum gold of sold in March and April. whereas, the minimum sold in December over a periodof time. Heavy a cursory glance on chart, it shows that in January 200 million of drame gold sold in 2000. however, it increased slightly at 250 million in next Month. Furthermore, in Dubai, gold has a sold 450 million of dirdam in March that it remained constant at 450 million in following month. Moreover, in may, 375 million of dirham gold sold by Dubai in 2000. whilst, it declined sharply at 325 million in June. After analysing remaining data, it is clear that in July 400million of dirham gold purchased in 2000. which went down quickly at 300 million in upcoming month. moving ahead, in December 400 million of dirham gold sold by Dubai in 2000. further, the figure was drop at 300 million of dirdam gold sold in October and it recorded that remained same at 300 million in forthcoming month. But it fell sharply at 150 million in the last month
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, it is
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that the maximum gold of sold in March and April.
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whereas
, the minimum sold in December over a
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periodof
time. Heavy a cursory glance on chart, it
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shows
that in January 200
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million
of
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drame
gold sold in 2000.
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however
, it increased
slightly
at 250
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million
in
next
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Furthermore
, in Dubai, gold has a sold 450
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dirdam
in March that it remained constant at 450
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million
in following
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, in
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may, 375
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dirham
gold sold by Dubai in 2000.
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whilst
, it declined
sharply
at 325
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million
in June. After
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analysing
remaining data, it is
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that in July
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400million
of
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dirham
gold
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purchased
in 2000.
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which
went down
quickly
at 300
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million
in upcoming
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.
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moving
ahead, in December 400
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dirham
gold sold by Dubai in 2000.
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further
, the figure was drop at 300
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dirdam
gold sold in October and it recorded that remained same at 300
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in forthcoming
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at 150
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month
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IELTS academic The linear graph depicts the information about the trend sales of gold in Dubai from January to December in 2002

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