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The line is not enough for 5.5 and the mobile is unnecessary despite all life conditions of use

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These pictures illustrate how tea is produced, and how a cup of tea Is made. There are 18 stages in the diagram, from sowing the tea seeds in India and China, to enjoying a cup of tea at home. The first step is that the tea seeds are sown, and then the sun shines, which causes the seeds to grow into plants. Once the plants have grown sufficiently, the leaves are then picked by the farmer and put into baskets. After the picking stage, the tea leaves are spread out in the sun to be dried. The tea leaves are packed into boxes and then they are loaded onto lorries, which take the boxes of tea to supermarkets. In order to make a cup of tea, first of all you buy a box of tea and take It home. Next, you ‘fill the kettle with water and put It on the stove to boll. Meanwhile, you put a tea bag in a cup, and once the kettle has holed, the water Is poured into the cup. Having been left in the cup for two minutes, the tea bag Is then removed, and the tea is now ready to drink. At this point, milk and sugar can be added. The final step 18 that you drink a nice cup of hot tea.
These pictures illustrate how
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tea
is produced
, and

how a
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cup
of
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tea
Is made
. There are 18 stages in the

diagram, from sowing the
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tea
seeds in India and China,

to enjoying a
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cup
of
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tea
at home.

The
first
step is that the
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tea
seeds
are sown
, and then

the sun shines, which causes the seeds to grow into

plants. Once the plants have grown
sufficiently
, the

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leaves
are then picked by the farmer and put into

baskets. After the picking stage, the
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tea
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leaves
are spread
out in the sun to
be dried
. The
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tea
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leaves
are packed
into
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boxes and
then they
are loaded
onto lorries,

which take the boxes of
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tea
to supermarkets.

In order to
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make
a
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cup
of
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tea
,
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first of all
you
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buy
a

box of
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tea
and take It home.
Next
, you ‘fill the kettle with

water and put It on the stove to boll. Meanwhile, you

put a
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tea
bag in a
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cup
, and once the kettle has holed,

the water
Is poured
into the
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cup
. Having been
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left
in the

cup for two minutes, the
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tea
bag Is then removed, and

the
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tea
is
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now
ready to drink. At this point, milk and

sugar can be
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added
. The final step 18 that you drink a

nice
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cup
of hot
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tea
.
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IELTS academic The line is not enough for 5. 5 and the mobile is unnecessary despite all life conditions of use

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  American English
6 paragraphs
221 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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