Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The line illustrates the changes of women in the UK in 6 different age groups over the period 35 years from 1973 to 2008.

The line illustrates the changes of women in the UK in 6 different age groups over the period 35 years from 1973 to 2008. lqxpD
The line illustrates the changes of women in the UK in 6 different age groups over the period 35 years from 1973 to 2008. it is clear that the number of women who fell into the 25-29, 20-25, under 20, and over 40 witnessed gradual going down meanwhile that of women who were 35-39 and 30-35 rose slightly from 1973 to 2008. The quantity of 25- 29 age was the highest figure. In terms of the first three figures, the data of women who were between 25-29 at 140 thousand people ranked the first figure followed by the women in the age range of 25-29 and 30-35 with 121 thousand and 72 thousand respectively in 1973. The rate of the 25-29 experienced significant fluctuation from 140 thousand in 1973 to 120 thousand in 2008. Besides, the quantity of the 20-25s decreased considerably to 100 in 2008 however that of the 30-35 age group saw slow rising by 10 thousand in 2008. acc to the least figures, the rate of the under 20 took up 60 thousand and that of women who were aged under 20 saw steady upward trend from 60 thousand in 1973 to 40 thousand in 2008 meanwhile that of women who were fell into the 35-39 age group with 40 thousand and there was considerable climbing by 22 thousand. However, the rate of the 40s and others witnessed a minimal decline from 20 thousand to 18 thousand.
The line illustrates the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
in the UK in 6
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
groups over the period 35 years from 1973 to 2008.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
it
is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
fell into the 25-29, 20-25, under 20, and over 40 witnessed gradual going down meanwhile that of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
were 35-39 and 30-35 rose
slightly
from 1973 to 2008. The quantity of
Consider using an n-dash (half dash), if you want to indicate numerical ranges or time ranges.
25- 29
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
was the highest figure.

In terms of the
first
three figures, the data of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
were between 25-29 at 140 thousand
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
ranked the
first
figure followed by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
range of 25-29 and 30-35 with 121 thousand and 72 thousand
respectively
in 1973. The rate of the 25-29 experienced significant fluctuation from 140 thousand in 1973 to 120 thousand in 2008.
Besides
, the quantity of the 20-25s decreased
considerably
to 100 in 2008
however
that of the 30-35
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
group
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
slow rising by 10 thousand in 2008.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
acc
to the least figures, the rate of the under 20 took up 60 thousand and that of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
were aged
under 20
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
steady upward trend from 60 thousand in 1973 to 40 thousand in 2008 meanwhile that of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
women
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
were fell into the 35-39
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
group with 40 thousand and there was considerable climbing by 22 thousand.
However
, the rate of the 40s
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
and others
witnessed a minimal decline from 20 thousand to 18 thousand.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The line illustrates the changes of women in the UK in 6 different age groups over the period 35 years from 1973 to 2008.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
240 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 5band
    The picture show the process od making cherry jam
    We want to explain the stages of prodechion of cherry jam. there are meny stages to for production of it, that involve picking the fruit from the trees and tronsport to the factory and production of chery jam. First a sheet is spread an the ground and the trees are shaken by machin then the cherrie...
  • 6.5band
    The Average Literacy Rate in The World and Some Countries
    The table depicts the average percentage of reading and writing ability in the world in average and five regions; Africa, Americas, Asia, Europe, and Oceania, divided by gender for 2000 to 2004. On average, there were 82. 2% of people were able to read and write in the world, with 87. 2% and 77. 3%...
  • 5band
    EASY WAYS TO HELP YOU STAY HEALTHY
    There are a lot of ways to stay healthy. First, you should have a healthy diet meal. You should eat some foods like fruits and vegetables, a variety of protein foods, and low-fat dairy products. Next, you need to have an enough sleep. A seven to nine hours sleep is very important, it help you improv...
  • 5band
    the graph below indicates the percentage of women smokers in Asia and Europe from 1950 to 2000. Write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown in the graph.
    The line graph illustrates the percentage of women smokers in Asia and Europe between 1950 and 2000. It can be seen from the graph that the figure for all areas experienced upward trends after the period surveyed. Besides, the figure for European Women was higher than Asian Women in all of the year...
  • 5band
    Poverty is the reason behind crimes. Do you agree or disagre?
    Many statistics show the top rating of the crimes occurred in poverty countries. We are talking about poor and developing economies located mostly undeveloped nations with a history of colonization. Therefore is relevant to point out there are two main factors that contributes for disgraceful scena...
  • 5band
    Why do people do things by hand?
    People do things by hand for many reasons. Some people are forced to do things by hand. For example when you invite your family at your house and there are burnt lights, so you should maintain these burned lights in a short time. Another reason is, it is a carrier for some people, at the same time t...