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The line graphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.

The line graphs illustrate the manufacture as well as demand to steel in million tonnes along with the number of employers employed in the industry of steel in the Britain in 2010. Overall, the amount of the production of steel was the highest in January whereas the demand of steel was fluctuating throughout the period. A glance at the line graph reflects that the poroduction of sted was the highest in january around 5000 million tonnes after that it observed slight reduction in the production. From April to August the manufacturing has been constant. In December it had the lowest production. The demand had been fluctuated throughout the period. However, it was at the peak with 3000 million tonnes whereas, it has been null in the month of december. Considerng the other factors of the graph, the number of workers employed january were 5000 million tonnes which had increased slightly In the next months. After that a sudden fall was observed moreover, till august the number workers was fluctuating, In addition to that, it had been decreased to 1000 in the month of december.
The line graphs illustrate the manufacture
as well
as demand to
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steel
in
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million
tonnes along with the number of employers employed in the industry of
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steel
in the Britain in 2010.

Overall
, the amount of the production of
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steel
was the highest in January whereas the demand of
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steel
was fluctuating throughout the period.

A glance at the line graph reflects that the
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poroduction
of
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sted
was the highest in
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january
around 5000
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million
tonnes after that it observed slight reduction in the production. From April to August the manufacturing has been constant. In
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December it
had the lowest production. The demand had
been fluctuated
throughout the period.
However
, it was at the peak with 3000
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million
tonnes whereas, it has been null in the month of
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december
.

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Considerng
the other factors of the graph, the number of workers employed
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january
were 5000
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million
tonnes which had increased
slightly
In the
next
months. After that a sudden fall
was observed
moreover
, till
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august
the number workers was fluctuating,
In addition
to that, it had
been decreased
to 1000 in the month of
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december
.
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IELTS academic The line graphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.

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