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The line graphbelow shows the percentage of total musicsales by method from 2011 until 2018

The line graphbelow shows the percentage of total musicsales by method from 2011 until 2018 Gnkm
The line graph comparesthe proprtion of total music sales by method in threesectors between 2011 and 2018. Overall, it is clear that the percentage of streams increased over the period shown while people ho bought Cds decreased during the next 7 years. In the 2011, the proportion of streams was about only 5%. The figures of downloads as well as CDs purchased were higher at 35% and 55% respectively. In 2014 music sales in streams rose to around 20% and the figure for downloads climbde to just over 40% whereas CDs purchased were went down to about 35% in 2014 from 60% in 2011. By 2018, the percentage of customers who purchased the streams was highest and over 40% compare to about 30% of downloads and only 25% of CDs purchased.
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comparesthe
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proprtion
of total music sales by method in
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threesectors
between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
, it is
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clear
that the percentage of
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streams
increased over the period shown while
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people
ho
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bought
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Cds
decreased during the
next
7 years. In the 2011, the proportion of
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streams
was about
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only
5%. The figures of downloads
as well
as
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CDs
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purchased
were higher at 35% and 55%
respectively
. In 2014 music sales in
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streams
rose to around 20% and the figure for downloads
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climbde
to
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just
over 40% whereas
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CDs
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purchased
were
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went
down to about 35% in 2014 from 60% in 2011. By 2018, the percentage of customers who
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purchased
the
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streams
was highest and over 40% compare to about 30% of downloads and
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only
25% of
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CDs
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purchased
.
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IELTS academic The line graphbelow shows the percentage of total musicsales by method from 2011 until 2018

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