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The line graph talks about the increase in percentage of Internet users in three different countries.

The line graph talks about the increase in percentage of Internet users in three different countries. qaAed
The line graph talks about the increase in percentage of Internet users in three different countries. It is ample clear from the graph that Canadians and Americans have been using the Internet at a fast pace thereby yearly increasing the percentage as compared to Mexicans whose growth has slowed. In the year 1999, all the three countries started properly with a gap in the numbers by 1 or 2 percent but slowly when users started rising upwards the Canadians crossed the Americans in 2001, and haven’t looked back since then. The natives of United States of America didn’t grew much, only when the two countries that is Canada and America came on to same level in 2002 and 2006 thereby sharing the podium altogether. The citizens or users of Mexico were on different lining in comparison to other two nations with respect to terms of usage and just maintaining the tortoise pace by not competing anywhere. In 2009, the internet addicts overtook the graph by finishing first and leaving other nations behind with the upward trend that is above the par level.
The line graph talks about the increase in percentage of Internet users in three
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different
countries.

It is ample
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clear
from the graph that Canadians and Americans have been using the Internet at a
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fast
pace thereby yearly increasing the percentage as compared to Mexicans whose growth has slowed.

In the year 1999, all the three countries
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started
properly
with a gap in the numbers by 1 or 2 percent
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but
slowly
when users
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started
rising upwards the Canadians crossed the Americans in 2001, and haven’t looked back since then. The natives
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of United States
of America didn’t
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grew
much,
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only
when the two countries
that is
Canada and America came on to same level in 2002 and 2006 thereby sharing the podium altogether. The citizens or users of Mexico were on
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different
lining
in comparison
to other two nations with respect to terms of usage and
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just
maintaining the tortoise pace by not competing anywhere.

In 2009, the internet addicts overtook the graph by finishing
first
and leaving other nations behind with the upward trend
that is
above the par level.
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IELTS academic The line graph talks about the increase in percentage of Internet users in three different countries.

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4 paragraphs
182 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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