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The line graph shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton

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The line graph compares the four highest Brighton’s visited places in England in term of percentage of tourists in the past 30 years. It is easy to notice that Pavilion was by far the most popular places to visits since around 1987 and art gallery attract lowest number of people since 2005. In 1980, Festival was the main destination for most of the visitor when they travel to Brighton which was around 30%. Art gallery and Pavilion was the second and the third favorite places for the tourists just above 20%, and the Pier was the least favorite places for people. However, five year later, Art gallery was the most popular places for most of the visitors. Just after 1985, percentage of visitor visited Pavilion rose dramatically to the peak of almost 50%. By contract, the figure for art gallery decreased every year and fell to under 10% in 2010 and became the last choice for tourists. Thus, number of people went to festival remain around 28% for the past decades and number of visits to Pier had been smooth growth from around 10% to 20%.

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