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The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010. 1dOA
The line chart reveals information on yearly revenues of three bakeries in London over the period from 2000 to 2010. Overall, during a ten-year period, while trends of Bernie’s Buns and Robbie’s Bakery are in an ascending order, the figures for Lovely Loaves decreased. At the start of the decade, Lovely Loaves grossed over 80, 000 in a year whereas Bernie’s Bun and Robbie’s Bakery’s annual incomes constituted in the vicinity of 55, 000 and 20, 000 respectively; however the latter’s 12-month financial gain remained unchanged till 2005, then it surpassed over 100, 000 in 2010 having had a two-fold increase preceded by a gradual growth. Lovely Loaves’ annual takings reached its peak, at around 95, 000, and then began to fluctuate till 2004, followed by a drop to 40, 000 in 2010. In contrast, the money that Bernie’s Buns earned, after witnessing mild oscillations, almost doubled (just under 40, 000) in 2003 and leveled out till 2005. Subsequently, having dipped negligibly in 2006, it started to continue its upward trend till 2010, at approximately 65, 000.
The line chart reveals information on yearly revenues of three bakeries in London over the period from 2000 to 2010.

Overall
, during a ten-year period, while trends of Bernie’s Buns and Robbie’s Bakery are
in an ascending order
, the figures for Lovely Loaves decreased.

At the
start
of the decade, Lovely Loaves grossed over 80, 000 in a year whereas Bernie’s Bun and Robbie’s Bakery’s annual incomes constituted in the vicinity of 55, 000 and 20, 000
respectively
;
however
the latter’s 12-month financial gain remained unchanged till 2005, then it surpassed over 100, 000 in 2010 having had a two-fold increase preceded by a gradual growth.

Lovely Loaves’ annual takings reached its peak, at around 95, 000, and then began to fluctuate till 2004, followed by a drop to 40, 000 in 2010.
In contrast
, the money that Bernie’s Buns earned, after witnessing mild oscillations, almost doubled (
just
under 40, 000) in 2003 and leveled out till 2005.
Subsequently
, having dipped
negligibly
in 2006, it
started
to continue its upward trend till 2010, at approximately 65, 000.
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