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The line graph shows the percentage of people who used five different communication methods between 1998 and 2008.

The line graph shows the percentage of people who used five different communication methods between 1998 and 2008. M3NG9
The given line chart illustrates the changing data of users of five different communication methods over the period 1998 to 2008. Overall, the research witnessed an upward trend across the board, except for the Landline service the only category that bucked the trend. Moreover, it is clear that the Cellular phone service had a remarkable increase. The gap between the five categories was widened over the given period. In particular, regarding the number of Landline service users, it stood at about 8% in 1998 and then dramatically and constantly increasing, reaching the peak at 60% in 2008, exceeding other factors to dominate the market since 2002. Similarly, the graph shows a consecutive growth in Internet service, starting from 5%, rising gradually, approaching about 21% in 2008. In the first 4 years of the research, there was no data about Fixed broadband and Mobile broadband recorded. But since 2002, these numbers tended to go up slowly, reaching approximately at 7% and 8% respectively. In stark contrast, the investigation shows a narrow fluctuation, ranging from 15% to 18% in Landline service from 1998 to 2004, followed by a rapid fall to 10% by the end of the research.
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different
communication methods over the period 1998 to 2008.
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, the research witnessed an upward trend across the board,
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except for
the Landline
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service
the
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only
category that bucked the trend.
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, it is
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clear
that the Cellular phone
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service
had a remarkable increase. The gap between the five categories
was widened
over the
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given
period.
In particular
, regarding the number of Landline
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service
users, it stood at about 8% in 1998 and then
dramatically
and
constantly
increasing, reaching the peak at 60% in 2008, exceeding other factors to dominate the market since 2002.
Similarly
, the graph
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shows
a consecutive growth in Internet
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service
, starting from 5%, rising
gradually
, approaching about 21% in 2008. In the
first
4 years of the research, there was no data about
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Fixed
broadband and Mobile broadband recorded.
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But
since 2002, these numbers tended to go up
slowly
, reaching approximately at 7% and 8%
respectively
. In stark contrast, the investigation
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shows
a narrow fluctuation, ranging from 15% to 18% in Landline
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service
from 1998 to 2004, followed by a rapid fall to 10% by the
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end
of the research.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the percentage of people who used five different communication methods between 1998 and 2008.

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