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The two given maps illustrate the changes of a particular area over a period of 23 years between 1995 and now

The two given maps illustrate the changes of a particular area over a period of 23 years between 1995 and now J3g2E
The two given maps illustrate the changes of a particular area over a period of 23 years between 1995 and now. Overall, it is clear that there are some significant renovations that are less green and more urbanized in the area. Over the years, the forest on the northwest side of the river has been cut down in order to make car parking for visitors. On the other side of the river, there is the modernized area on the right top corner which includes apartments and housing. Moreover, small car parking has been erected which connects to the road bridge. On the other hand, a few houses have been constructed on the northeast of the river. There are several changes that will be opened on the southeast of the river which will be included yatch marina and car park by 2018. A new footbridge will also be built which will be located parallel to the road bridge.
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maps illustrate the
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changes
of a particular area over a period of 23 years between 1995 and
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now
.
Overall
, it is
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clear
that there are
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some
significant renovations that are less green and more urbanized in the area.

Over the years, the forest on the northwest side of the
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river
has been
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cut
down in order to
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make
car parking for visitors. On the other side of the
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river
, there is the modernized area on the right top corner which includes apartments and housing.
Moreover
,
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small
car parking has
been erected
which connects to the road bridge.

On the other hand
, a few
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houses
have
been constructed
on the northeast of the
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river
. There are several
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changes
that will
be opened
on the southeast of the
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river
which will
be included
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yatch
marina and car park by 2018. A new footbridge will
also
be built
which will
be located
parallel to the road bridge.

IELTS academic The two given maps illustrate the changes of a particular area over a period of 23 years between 1995 and now

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