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The line graph shows the number of cases of X disease in Someland between 1983-1992

The line graph shows the number of cases of X disease in Someland between 1983-1992 YwAMr
The graph illustrates the figure for events of illness in Someland from 1983 to 1992. It is important to note that over the period there was a sharp drop and increase in numbers. Also, the highest rate in this line graph was 400 and the lowest was 0 during the 9 years. Initially, it can be seen that the proportion of cases of disease remained unchanged in 1983 from 1984. Moreover, the figure was increase steadily to reach 200 in 1987, followed by a significant decline until 1988. After declining considerably, the number of disease started to soar and go up to reach a peak in 1989. In a year, number of cases fell slightly and by 1991, the cases had remained stable. In addition, in the end of this period proportion of incidents of sickness in Someland was plunge totally and bottom out in 1992. Lastly, there was a fluctuation during the 5 years.
The graph illustrates the figure for
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events
of illness in
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Someland
from 1983 to 1992.

It is
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important
to note that over the period there was a sharp drop and increase in numbers.
Also
, the highest rate in this line graph was 400 and the lowest was 0 during the 9 years.

Initially
, it can be
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seen
that the proportion of cases of disease remained unchanged in 1983 from 1984.
Moreover
, the figure was increase
steadily
to reach 200 in 1987, followed by a significant decline until 1988. After declining
considerably
, the number of disease
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started
to soar and go up to reach a peak in 1989. In a year, number of cases fell
slightly
and by 1991, the cases had remained stable.
In addition
, in the
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end
of this period proportion of incidents of sickness in
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Someland
was plunge
totally
and bottom out in 1992.
Lastly
, there was a fluctuation during the 5 years.
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