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the line graph shows the information on the consumption of 3 kinds of spread in a European country from 1981 to 2007

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The line chart illustrates how many grams is used by 3 kinds of spread in a European country namely margarine, low fat spreads and butter between 1981 to 2007. Overall, the amount of low fat spreads witnessed an upswing, while the opposite was true for butter and margarine. In 1981, the amount of butter which stood at 140 grams, experienced an increase of 20 grams in 1986, followed by a significant drop to about 50 grams in 2007. In 1981, the figure for magarince was 90 grams, before decreasing slightly to 80 grams in 1986, and then it fluctuated between 100 and 80 grams 15 years later and fell to 40 grams in 2007. The amount of low fat spread consumption stood at 10 grams in 1996. However, 5 years later it rocketed and reached a peak of about 85 grams, which decreased slightly by about 5 grams in 2007.
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by 3 kinds of
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in a European country
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margarine, low
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and butter
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witnessed an upswing, while the opposite was true for butter and margarine.

In 1981, the amount of butter which stood at 140
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, experienced an increase of 20
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in 1986, followed by a significant drop to about 50
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in 2007. In 1981, the figure for
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magarince
was 90
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,
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before
decreasing
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to 80
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in 1986, and then it fluctuated between 100 and 80
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15 years later and fell to 40
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in 2007.

The amount of low
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fat
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spread
consumption stood at 10
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grams
in 1996.
However
, 5 years later it rocketed and reached a peak of about 85
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, which decreased
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by about 5
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in 2007.
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IELTS academic the line graph shows the information on the consumption of 3 kinds of spread in a European country from 1981 to 2007

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150 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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