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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the change in the percentage of market share represented by the three forms. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The line graph depicts the cost for accessing movies in three different platforms such as, Cinema ticket, DVD, and Legal download from 2005 to 2011. The two pie charts give a snapshot of the substitute in the ratio of market segment represented by, Go to the cinema, Watch online(legal download), and Rent DVD in 2005 and 2011. At initial observation, the line graph reveals that each trends varied significantly during the four years period, whereby the three trends show different figures and pattern. Furthermore, the pie charts illustrate that the proportion of market share in three types also disparate throughout the given two years. At closer analysis, the cost of cinema ticket was just about 9£ in 2005, and it rose dramatically to just over 10£ in the second year. By 2009, the revenue increased slightly to just nearly 12£ in 2009, and the trend again increased abruptly to 14£ within the last year of this period. Conversely, the price of purchasing DVD grew gradually from 6£ to 8£ between the beginning till the end of this period. Moreover, there was a sharp decrease in the numerous price of the legal download, which dropped from8£ to 6£ in the first two years and it reached to 9£ in 2011. The details in the pie charts manifest that the percentage of market share in watching online was only 6% in 2005, and this changed 20% to just over a quarter in2011. On the other hand, the market penetration of both, Go to cinema and Rent a DVD, dropped the popularity in 6 years interval simultaneously, and Go to cinema eventually became the less popularity in majority in 2011 among the others.
The line graph depicts the cost for accessing movies in three
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different
platforms such as,
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Cinema
ticket, DVD, and Legal download from 2005 to 2011. The two pie charts give a snapshot of the substitute in the ratio of
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market
segment represented by, Go to the
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cinema
,
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Watch
online(legal download), and Rent DVD in 2005 and 2011. At initial observation, the line graph reveals that each trends varied
significantly
during the four years period, whereby the three trends
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show
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different
figures and pattern.
Furthermore
, the pie charts illustrate that the proportion of
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market
share in three types
also
disparate throughout the
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given
two years. At closer analysis, the cost of
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cinema
ticket was
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just
about
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9£
in 2005, and it rose
dramatically
to
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just
over
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "£10".
10£
in the second
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year
. By 2009, the revenue increased
slightly
to
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just
nearly
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "£12".
12£
in 2009, and the trend again increased
abruptly
to
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14£
within the last
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year
of this period.
Conversely
, the price of purchasing DVD grew
gradually
from
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6£
to
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8£
between the beginning till the
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end
of this period.
Moreover
, there was a sharp decrease in the numerous price of the legal download, which dropped from
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "£8".
8£
to
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "£6".
6£
in the
first
two years and it reached to
The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "£9".
9£
in 2011. The
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details
in the pie charts manifest that the percentage of
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market
share in watching online was
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only
6% in 2005, and this
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changed
20% to
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just
over a quarter in2011.
On the other hand
, the
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market
penetration of both, Go to
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cinema
and Rent a DVD, dropped the popularity in 6 years interval
simultaneously
, and Go to
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cinema
eventually
became the less popularity in majority in 2011 among the others.

IELTS academic The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the change in the percentage of market share represented by the three forms.

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