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the line graph shows the consumption of four types of dairy product in the USA from 1970 to 2010

The graph illustrates the amount of four different types of dairy products in the USA between 1970 and 2010. Overall, it is clear that the consumption of the dairy product had an upward trend throughout the entire period except for Full fat ice cream. Cheese accounted for the highest consumption in the graph. Looking in detail, Cheese has a starting point at approximately 7 Pounds in 1970 and triple that number after 40 years. This made it the leading type of dairy product in the USA. The full fat ice cream was the group with the highest amount in 1970, about 11 pounds. However, this started to fall steadily and was overtaken by Cheese with 10 pounds. On the other hand, Yogurt increased sharply 5 times more than the initial level from 1970 to 2010. This made it the second-largest consumption in the graph. The low-fat ice cream is less consumed than other products. Over 40 years, there was a minimal change and it was still at 4 pounds.

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IELTS academic the line graph shows the consumption of four types of dairy product in the USA from 1970 to 2010

Academic

American English

4 paragraphs

169 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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