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The line graph shows the average prices of tickets sold at a theatre and the bar graph shows the average percentage of tickets sold in 2010 and 2011.

The line graph shows the average prices of tickets sold at a theatre and the bar graph shows the average percentage of tickets sold in 2010 and 2011. WanD
The information about the figure of the average prices of tickets sold at a theatre and percentage of tickets sold from 2010 and 2011 has been illustrated by providing combination of Line and column graph. Overall, it is evident that maximum prices of tickets was in quater 4 in 2010. However the less percentage of tickets in first quarter in 2011. The line graphs shows the number prices of tickets sold stabilized at € 9. 5 in the first and second quarter in 2010, after that sharp incline at 10. 5 pounds in third quarter of 2010. There was remained the same 3 quarter in 2010 from 2 quater of 2011 at 10. 5 pounds. In 2011 the price of tickets was declined at 10 pounds in third quarter, but picked up reached again at € 10. 5 in 4 quater. In 2010, the percentage of tickets was similar 60% in quater 1 and 2, but 3 quater gradually decreased near about 50% wheareas in the 4 quater was on peak point of 80%. The less percentage of tickets sold in quater 1 and 2 in 2011, in the 4 quater grew up again near about 70%.
The information about the figure of the average
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prices
of
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tickets
was in
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quater
4 in 2010.
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in 2011. The line graphs
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. In 2010, the
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the average prices of tickets sold at a theatre and the bar graph shows the average percentage of tickets sold in 2010 and 2011.

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