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The bar charts illustrate the coffee and tea consumption and purchase habits of Australians based on a survey conducted in 5 cities.

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The bar charts illustrate the coffee and tea consumption and purchase habits of Australians based on a survey conducted in 5 cities. Overall, most of the people who live in Melbourne preferred to buy their drink from a cafe. Furthermore, fresh coffee seemed to be less popular in Brisbane and Adelaide, while instant coffee was quite popular in Hobart. Approximately 63% of the residents in Melbourne and Hobart drank a cup of coffee that was bought from a cafe. This figure is the highest out of the three categories. Moreover, most of the residents in Hobart, around 54% of its total population, also purchased instant coffee in the last 4 weeks. Meanwhile, in Sydney, around 44% of its population like to drink their coffee, if it is freshly made. In contrast, the consumption of fresh coffee in Brisbane and Adelaide was relatively low where it was both around 34% for both.
The bar charts illustrate the
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and tea consumption and
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habits of Australians based on a survey conducted in 5 cities.

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, most of the
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in Melbourne preferred to
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their drink from a
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Furthermore
, fresh
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coffee
seemed to be less popular in Brisbane and Adelaide, while instant
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coffee
was quite popular in Hobart.

Approximately 63% of the residents in Melbourne and Hobart drank a cup of
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coffee
that was
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bought
from a
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cafe
. This figure is the highest out of the three categories.
Moreover
, most of the residents in Hobart, around 54% of its total population,
also
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instant
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in the last 4 weeks.

Meanwhile, in Sydney, around 44% of its population like to drink their
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coffee
, if it is
freshly
made.
In contrast
, the consumption of fresh
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in Brisbane and Adelaide was
relatively
low where it was both around 34% for both.
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IELTS academic The bar charts illustrate the coffee and tea consumption and purchase habits of Australians based on a survey conducted in 5 cities.

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