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The bar chart below shows employment figures in different tourism-related industries between 2009 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows employment figures in different tourism-related industries between 2009 and 2019. 12by
The stacked bar-chart provides information about the total number of employed workers in 2009 and 2019, in 5 different industries that are related to the wider tourism sector. Overall, the total number of people working in tourism-linked industries has increased from a total of one million in 2009 to one million and two-hundred thousand in 2019. However, the single sectors display a much more mixed case. Firstly, the number of people working in food-related jobs has considerably increased by 75. 3 thousand, making it the fastest growing industry. Sports jobs also experience a significant growth trend in the total number of employees, with a positive net change of 65 thousand since 2009. Furthermore, the general “travel” industry experiences a particular boost in employment with a net change of 53. 3 thousand people, making it the third fastest growing sector among the ones surveyed. On the other hand, Hotels and other facilities for accommodation experience a relatively modest upward trend in their respective number of workers, growing by 6. 8 thousand, while museums, galleries and culture-related activities compose the only sector which witnesses a fall in numbers of employed people, going from 82. 8 thousand workers in 2009 to 77. 4 thousand in 2019.
The stacked bar-chart provides information about the
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of employed workers in 2009 and 2019, in 5
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.
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, the
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of
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working in tourism-linked industries has increased from a
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of one million in 2009 to one million and two-hundred thousand in 2019.
However
, the single
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sectors
display a much more mixed case.

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, the
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of
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working in food-related jobs has
considerably
increased by 75. 3 thousand, making it the fastest growing industry.

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Sports jobs
also
experience a significant growth trend in the
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of employees, with a
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net
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of 65 thousand since 2009.

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, the general “travel” industry experiences a particular boost in employment with a net
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of 53. 3 thousand
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people
, making it the third fastest growing
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among the ones surveyed.

On the other hand
, Hotels and other facilities for accommodation experience a
relatively
modest upward trend in their respective
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of workers, growing by 6. 8 thousand, while museums, galleries and culture-related activities compose the
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only
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which witnesses a fall in
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of employed
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people
, going from 82. 8 thousand workers in 2009 to 77. 4 thousand in 2019.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows employment figures in different tourism-related industries between 2009 and 2019.

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6.0
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