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The bar graph shows about the proportion of students visit to Britain. Make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph shows about the proportion of students visit to Britain. Make comparisons where relevant. KydO6
The bar graph depicts the information about that how much students move to the UK for study purpose. Overview, the most striking feature is that largest percentage of students visited the Britain from India, whereas least amount of students from Cyprus. At the fleeting glance, it is immensely clear, in 1990, students, who came from India, was recorded around 1000 as compared to the New Zealand students which experienced at above 600.
The bar graph depicts the information about that how
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students
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move
to the UK for study purpose. Overview, the most striking feature is that largest percentage of
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students
visited the Britain from India, whereas least amount of
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students
from Cyprus.

At the fleeting glance, it is
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, in 1990,
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students
, who came from India,
was recorded
around 1000 as compared to the New Zealand
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students
which experienced at above 600.
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