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the line graph shows social media use among 30-45 years-olds in New Zealand in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The given line graph provides information about the use of social media platform in 2018, by people from New Zealand, who belong to the age group of 30 to 45 years. Overall, it is evident that the popularity of most of the apps has decreased by the end of the year, but Facebook on the other hand, experienced only a slight fall and managed to stay the most used platform throughout the year. Clearly, Facebook had the highest number of users during the given period, it started with a peak of 45% in January, after which, it experienced slight fluctuation before falling down by 15% at the end of the year. LinkedIn however, had a sharp fall in it's popularity, which took it from just below 45% in the beginning of 2018 to as low as 10% by the end. Although the figures fell down to half for Pinterest and Twitter by the end, the trends still have been comparatively steady for these two. In the beginning, around 10% people used Pinterest and 5% used Twitter, but they were left to only 5% and 2. 5% respectively as the year reached to an end.
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