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The graph shows that the production of steel and workers work in industry in uk in 2010

The graph shows that the production of steel and workers work in industry in uk in 2010 j52Pa
The polyline graph reveals the information about the production and consumption for steel in million tonnes. The whole data given in million tonnes. To begin with, The production of steel was 4000 million in january in 2010 which was remain constant till august after that steel manufacturing was decreased which was 3000 million in august. Then it was reached at 5000 million tones. At last it was fall downin december at 1000million. In case of workers, 2000million workers was worked in january in steel industry. It showed zig_zag trend from january to augustin 2010in united kingdom. In december the amount of workers increase again which was reached at 2000million. Overall, steel production showed downward trend but in the industry workers show upward trend.
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manufacturing
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tones. At
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industry. It
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the amount of
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downward trend
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in the industry
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IELTS academic The graph shows that the production of steel and workers work in industry in uk in 2010

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