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The line graph shows consumption of fast food in the UK between 1970-1990

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The given line graph illustrates the eaten of three types of fast food, namely hamburger, fish and chips, and pizza in the United Kingdom during the twenty-year period, from 1970 to 1990. Overall, we can see that there were significant increases in the amount of consuming hamburger and fish and chips while the amount of eating pizza gradually declined. In 1970, the consumption of pizza was 300%, while the percentages of people who ate fish and chips, and hamburger were around 50%. The following ten years, the amount used for eating fish and chips, and hamburger rose by around 100%, but the percentage of consuming pizza dropped considerably by nearly 200%. By 1990, the percentage of fish and chips consumers reached a peak remarkably, was 500%, while consumption of hamburger grew approximately 300% over the same ten year period. By contrast, the amount of eating pizza nearly remained stable, at about 200% respectively.
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hamburger, fish and chips, and pizza in the United Kingdom during the twenty-year period, from 1970 to 1990.
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that there were significant increases in the
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of consuming hamburger and fish and chips while the
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of eating pizza
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declined. In 1970, the consumption of pizza was 300%, while the percentages of
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who ate fish and chips, and hamburger were around 50%. The following ten years, the
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for eating fish and chips, and hamburger rose by around 100%,
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, was 500%, while consumption of hamburger grew approximately 300% over the same
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