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The line graph shows average tickets sold at a theater and bar graph shows the average proportion of tickets sold in 2010 and 2011.

The line graph shows average tickets sold at a theater and bar graph shows the average proportion of tickets sold in 2010 and 2011. JMyB
The line graph provides the information about the normal prices of tickets sold at a cinema and the bar graph illustrates the average proportion of tickets sold from 2010 to 2011. Overall, we can see in initial period of 2010 average wages of tickets was lower while fourth quarter in 2011 tickets prices rose. In both years at the fourth quarter average proportion of tickets sold ratio was highest. In 2010, tickets sold at a theatre normal wages were more than 9 pound in first and second quarters. From quarters three to four tickets prices drastically increased and made up to 10. 5 pounds in 2010. Moreover, from 2011 first quarter to second theater normal prices remain same 10. 5 pounds. Finally, in 2010 three and four quarters normal wages were 10. 3 pounds, 10. 5 pounds respectively. In 2011, everett tickets sold in quarter one and second proportion was same and it was 60%. In 2011, third quarter ratio dropped and made up to 45% while in fourth quarter tickets sold proportion increased up to 80%. Furthermore, in 2011 average tickets sold rates same for quarter one and two. Eventually, quarter three normal tickets sold rate was 45% and quarter four ratio was 65% in 2011.
The line graph provides the information about the
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sold from 2010 to 2011.

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in 2011
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rose. In both years at the fourth
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to second theater
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one and second
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was same and it was 60%. In 2011, third
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ratio dropped and made up to 45% while in fourth
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increased up to 80%.
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sold rates same for
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one and two.
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sold rate was 45% and
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was 65% in 2011.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows average tickets sold at a theater and bar graph shows the average proportion of tickets sold in 2010 and 2011.

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