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The line graph show the number of men and women and women smoker per 1000 people.

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The presented line graph illustrates the number of both gender per 1000, who prefer to smoke between 1960 and 2000, in the Bhutan. Analyzing the detai of 1960 to 1965, the gigantic diffrence wa noticed in the number of men and women. The number of women increased gradually from 30 to 500; however, men increased 500 to 580. For the next decade, a meager dropp was observed to 500 in 1980 of women, whereas men had gained momentum to reach their all time high over the 300. , but at the end of the year slightly plunged to 350. For the rest of the 20 years, the numbers had followed the same pattern. There was a moderate decline in the number of male and women, they accounted 400 and 200 respectively. similarly, at the end of the year both reached to the rock bottom, male had 180 and women had 250. Overall, it can be vividly seen that men's preference fir smoking declined slowly during the period; however, male prefer to smoke more than yesteryear.
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of both gender per 1000, who prefer to smoke between 1960 and 2000, in the Bhutan. Analyzing the
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of 1960 to 1965, the gigantic
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noticed in the
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of
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. The
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of
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women
increased
gradually
from 30 to 500;
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,
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increased 500 to 580. For the
next
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dropp
was observed
to 500 in 1980 of
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women
, whereas
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had gained momentum to reach their
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high over the 300.
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of the year
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plunged to 350. For the rest of the 20 years, the
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had followed the same pattern. There was a moderate decline in the
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of male and
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women
, they accounted 400 and 200
respectively
.
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similarly
, at the
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of the year both reached to the rock bottom, male had 180 and
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had 250.
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, it can be
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seen
that
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men
's preference fir smoking declined
slowly
during the period;
however
, male prefer to smoke more than yesteryear.
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IELTS academic The line graph show the number of men and women and women smoker per 1000 people.

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