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The line graph show the gold sale in Dubai since 2002.

The line graph show the gold sale in Dubai since 2002. VBpaw
The line graph shows estimated sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of dirhams. There were two main seasons for gold sales. The main season for sale is in the December to may period. Sale were consistently above 200 million dirhams per month, rising sharply to a peak of 350 million dirhams in March. However, for the next four months sale declined steadily, reaching an annual low of 120 million dirhams in July. In August comedy there was a sudden sale almost doubled com arising from 120 million dirhams insale almost doubled, rising from 120 million dirhams in July to 210 million dirhams in August. This was followed by a drop in the samba, back to the July figure. From September to October, sales a recovered, from 120 to 180 million. In October and November, sales remained steady, and there was a small increase in the December to 190 million dirhams. Overall, the main sale period is in the early part of the year, slumming in the summer, expect for a sudden increase in August.
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of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in
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. There were two main seasons for gold
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. The main season for
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is in the December to
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per month, rising
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in March.
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declined
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dirhams
in July. In August comedy there was a sudden
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almost doubled com arising from 120
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dirhams
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almost doubled, rising from 120
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in July to 210
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in August. This
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by a drop in the samba, back to the July figure. From September to October,
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a recovered, from 120 to 180
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. In October and November,
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remained steady, and there was a
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increase in the December to 190
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dirhams
.
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, the main
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period is in the early part of the year, slumming in the summer,
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for a sudden increase in August.
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IELTS academic The line graph show the gold sale in Dubai since 2002.

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