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The Line graph represents the information about the changes that took place in the year of the three different areas of crime in newport city center between 2003 to 2012

The Line graph represents the information about the changes that took place in the year of the three different areas of crime in newport city center between 2003 to 2012 kbm1K
The given chart shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city between 2003 to 2012. Overall, it can be noticed that the balcony incidents were significantly reduced during the given period while card theft and robbery were released at its initial value at last. Initially, the cases of burglary were reported under 3500 in 2003. Then, it witnessed a noticeable rise in the cases of burglary about 4000. In the next three years, there was a significant reduction in the incidents of burglary. Before rise slightly, it reached it's lowest value at about 1200. In the next four year, its value almost remain stable about 1400. Over the same period, the rates of car theft and robbery varied less significantly than that of burglary. In the first three years, the cases of car reported were remained static about 2800. Then, it dipped to it's lowest level at almost 2000 in 2006. In the next four years, there were minor fluctuation in the rates of car theft and it reached over 2500 in 2010. Then, its value remained stable in the next two years. Likewise, the cases of robbery were reported between 500 and 1000 no. Of incidents. In 2003, the no. of incidents were reported about 600. After that, the no. Of incidents rose to about 900 in 2005. Then, it reached it's lowest value 500 in 2008. In the next four years, there was minor fluctuation in the no. Of cases and it reached it's initial value.
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reported
under 3500 in 2003. Then, it witnessed a noticeable rise in the cases of
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burglary
about 4000. In the
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three years, there was a significant reduction in the
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incidents
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burglary
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four
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almost remain stable about 1400. Over the same period, the rates of car theft and robbery varied less
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burglary
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four years, there were minor fluctuation in the rates of car theft and it
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over 2500 in 2010. Then, its
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between 500 and 1000
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about 600. After that, the no. Of
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500 in 2008. In the
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IELTS academic The Line graph represents the information about the changes that took place in the year of the three different areas of crime in newport city center between 2003 to 2012

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