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School subject preferences in New South Wales

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The given pie charts show information on the school subject preferences in New South Wales during two years. Overall, the only school subjects which declined in their percentages were physics, maths and geography from 2014 to 2018, whereas the other subjects experienced a significantly rise in their percentages. In 2014 the most prefered school subject was geography with over a quarter, followed by maths with nearly as much percentage and then physics with 19, 4 percent. Biology was with 13. 4 percent the fifth prefered school subject and followed by PE with 8. 7 percent. The other left subjects did not reached over 2 percent. Four years later in 2018 a sharply shift could be experienced. The highest downfall was recorded on the subject geography from 27. 7 percent to 3. 7 percent. Furthermore maths experienced a considerably decrease from 27. 3 percent to 16. 7 percent. In 2018 biology and PE made nearly half together of the whole percentages regarding school subject preferences.
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preferences in New South Wales during two years.

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which declined in their percentages were physics,
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and geography from 2014 to 2018, whereas the other
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was geography with over a quarter, followed by
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as much percentage and then physics with 19, 4
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. Biology was with 13. 4
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the fifth
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and followed by PE with 8. 7
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. Four years later in 2018 a
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geography from 27. 7
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Furthermore
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from 27. 3
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to 16. 7
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IELTS academic School subject preferences in New South Wales

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