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The line graph provides information about the number of students from Iran, Greece, and Turkey enrolling at Sheffield University from 2005 to 2009.

The line graph provides information about the number of students from Iran, Greece, and Turkey enrolling at Sheffield University from 2005 to 2009. yLbmM
Generally, the levels of Iranian and Turkish students who studied at University of Sheffield experienced an upward trend. On the other hand, Sheffield’s students who came from Greece showed an extreme decrease. Starting from 2005 to 2007, the figure of Iran’s and Turkey's enrolment had rose significantly, Iran’s from almost 40 students to about 70 students, and Turkey’s from 20 students to around 90 students. This trend continued until the end of the period and reached the peak of 160 students and more than 120 students respectively. By contrast, in 2005, the figure of Greek students enrolment was at 180 students. Then, it felt gradually to less than 160 students in 2006. This marked followed by a dramatic decline, where the number of students reduced by around 20 in the year 2007. It continued until the end of the given period and hit a lowest rate of approximately 42 students.
Generally
, the levels of Iranian and Turkish
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who studied at University of Sheffield experienced an upward trend.
On the other hand
, Sheffield’s
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who came from Greece
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showed
an extreme decrease.

Starting from 2005 to 2007, the figure of Iran’s and Turkey's
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had rose
significantly
, Iran’s from almost 40
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to about 70
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students
, and Turkey’s from 20
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students
to around 90
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students
. This trend continued until the
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end
of the period and reached the peak of 160
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students
and more than 120
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students
respectively
.

By contrast, in 2005, the figure of Greek
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students
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enrolment
was at 180
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students
. Then, it felt
gradually
to less than 160
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students
in 2006. This marked followed by a dramatic decline, where the number of
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students
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reduced
by around 20 in the year 2007. It continued until the
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end
of the
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given
period and hit
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a
lowest rate of approximately 42
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IELTS academic The line graph provides information about the number of students from Iran, Greece, and Turkey enrolling at Sheffield University from 2005 to 2009.

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