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The line graph indicates the changes in the number of people who watched the news on Channel One over the period of a year.

The line graph indicates the changes in the number of people who watched the news on Channel One over the period of a year. R9GW
The line graph indicates the changes in the number of people who watched the news on Channel One over the period of a year. The news is shown at 1pm, 6pm, and 9: 30pm, while a new news show at 11pm began on May the 1st. Overall, the 6pm show usually received the most views, although the 11pm show was watched more in August. Moreover, during August the 9: 30pm show plummeted in viewer numbers, passing the 1pm show to become the least watched version of the news. At the beginning of the year, the 6pm show received almost 5 million viewers, which was the highest number for any show throughout the period. After that, viewer numbers fluctuated with an overall downward trend, and they reached a low in August of around 3. 2 million. At this time, the 1130pm news reached its peak of just over 4m viewers after only having around 200000 when it began at the start of May. However, while the 6pm news ended the period at its August-level, the 1130pm news dropped sharply to slightly over 1m viewers. With regard to the 9: 30pm news, its figures climbed steadily until May then plunged to a low of around 1m in May when the 11: 00pm news began. From then on, it grew significantly to about 3m in December. Finally, the 1pm show remained stable over the year at about 1. 3m views per day.
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at 11pm began on May the 1st.

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received the most views, although the 11pm
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more in August.
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plummeted in
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, passing the 1pm
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to become the least
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version of the news.

At the beginning of the year, the 6pm
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received almost 5 million
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, which was the highest
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throughout the period. After that,
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fluctuated with an
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having around 200000 when it began at the
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ended the period at its August-level, the 1130pm
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dropped
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viewers.

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, its figures climbed
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1m
in May when the 11: 00pm
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began. From then on, it grew
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3m
in December.
Finally
, the 1pm
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remained stable
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the year at about 1.
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views per day.
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