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The line graph illustrates the unemployment rate in Australia, in the year 2012.

The line graph illustrates the unemployment rate in Australia, in the year 2012. L638
The line graph illustrates the unemployment rate in Australia, in the year 2012. In general, the unemployment rate is particularly higher in rural areas, compared to urban areas. In the first quarter, 6% where unemployed in rural regimen, 2% in urban regimen. However, the number deteriorated eventually to well below 5% by the end of second quarter. Whereas, in urban areas the number gradually upscale to 4% by mid-second quarter. However, this number decreased then after to 2% by 3rd quarter, then again the graph took a sharp inclination to about 4% by the end of 3rd quarter, at the end of the year it stood at 5% of unemployment rate in urban areas. Furthermore, in the rural areas, the unemployment rate reached well above 5% by third quarter, remained fairly the same thorough the year then after. By the end of the year the number of unemployed both rural and urban where almost the same around 5%.
The line graph illustrates the
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in Australia, in the
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year
2012.

In general
, the
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unemployment
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rate
is
particularly
higher in
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rural
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areas
, compared to
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urban
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. In the
first
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quarter
, 6% where unemployed in
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rural
regimen, 2% in
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urban
regimen.
However
, the
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deteriorated
eventually
to well below 5% by the
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end
of second
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quarter
.
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, in
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the
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gradually
upscale to 4% by mid-second
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quarter
.
However
, this
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decreased then after to 2% by 3rd
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quarter
, then again the graph took a sharp inclination to about 4% by the
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of 3rd
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, at the
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of the
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it stood at 5% of
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in
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areas.

Furthermore
, in the
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rural
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, the
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unemployment
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reached well above 5% by third
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, remained
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then after. By the
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of the
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the
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of unemployed both
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where almost the same around 5%.
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the unemployment rate in Australia, in the year 2012.

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158 words
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