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The line graph illustrates the research giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a specific country in the period from 2000 to 2015.

The line graph illustrates the research giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a specific country in the period from 2000 to 2015. m8lLO
The line graph illustrates the research giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a specific country in the period from 2000 to 2015. Overall, people relocating for the purpose of study, family/friends and adventure experienced upward trends while the reversed trends was saw by the other. Although, in the begining, the reason of employment obtain the highest figures, in the last period, that figures for the purpose of study surge and intersect with employment. From 2000 to 2005, there was a nearly a parallel run from two reason for relocating – family/friends and adventure – with a slight increase to 12000 and 11000 respectively. In the next five years, people moved to capital cities for family/friends witness a significant climb to 22000, while the reason for adventure saw a previous trends to about 13000. From 2010 to 2015, the two reason – family/friends and adventure - showed a similiar trends with the beginning to 23000 and 15000 respectively. From 2000 to 2005, the two reason relocating for employment and study ran paralell with an upward trends to 85000 and 49000 respectively. In the next five years, the two reason showed a previous trends, however they just rise moderately when compared to the beginning. In the last period from 2010 to 2015, people moved to capital cities because of employment plummeted, whereas that figure for studying rocketed and created intersection with employment at about 8800.
The line graph illustrates the research giving the
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to the capital city of a specific country in the period from 2000 to 2015.

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relocating for the purpose of study,
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and
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experienced upward
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trends
while the reversed
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, the
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obtain the highest figures, in the last period, that figures for the purpose of study surge and intersect with employment.

From 2000 to 2005, there was a
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a parallel run from two
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reason
for relocating
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–
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adventure
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with a slight increase to 12000 and 11000
respectively
. In the
next
five years,
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people
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moved
to capital cities for
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family/friends
witness a significant climb to 22000, while the
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reason
for
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adventure
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a previous
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to about 13000. From 2010 to 2015, the two
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and
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adventure
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a
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similiar
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with the beginning to 23000 and 15000
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.

From 2000 to 2005, the two
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relocating for
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and study ran
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paralell
with an upward
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to 85000 and 49000
respectively
. In the
next
five years, the two
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reason
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showed
a previous
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,
however
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rise
moderately
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people
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to capital cities
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of
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employment
plummeted, whereas that figure for studying rocketed and created intersection with
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employment
at about 8800.
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the research giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a specific country in the period from 2000 to 2015.

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