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The diagram illustrates how many stages in using clay to manufacture bricks in construction industry.

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The diagram illustrates how many stages in using clay to manufacture bricks in construction industry. It is clear that there are seven stages of the process, starting from collecting clay and ending at delivering the mixture to the users in society At the beginning, the workers seek and collect numerous clays in the ground by huge diggers. After that, it will be sorted to sand, water separately and delivered to the next respectively by metal grids and roll machine. Then, it would be edited by form and cut into equal small pieces before it was dried during 24-48 hours by heat room. In the penultimate, it heated from 200*C to 980*C and next to 870*C-1300*C. After that, the productions are kept in a cooling chamber from 42 to 72 hours. When it finishes, it is packaged rapidly to prepare for delivery to customers.
The diagram illustrates how
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stages in using clay to manufacture bricks in construction industry.

It is
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clear
that there are seven stages of the process, starting from collecting clay and ending at delivering the mixture to the users in society

At the beginning, the workers seek and collect numerous clays in the ground by huge diggers. After that, it will
be sorted
to sand, water
separately
and delivered to the
next
respectively
by metal grids and roll machine.

Then, it would
be edited
by form and
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cut
into equal
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small
pieces
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before
it
was dried
during 24-48 hours by heat room. In the penultimate, it heated from
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200*C
to
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980*C
and
next
to
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870*C
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1300*C
. After that, the productions are
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kept
in a cooling chamber from 42 to 72 hours. When it finishes, it
is packaged
rapidly
to prepare for delivery to customers.
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