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The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourist who travelled aquarium, castle, zoo, festival in Edinburgh from 1980 to 2010.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourist who travelled aquarium, castle, zoo, festival in Edinburgh from 1980 to 2010. KygO6
The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourist who travelled aquarium, castle, zoo, festival in Edinburgh from 1980 to 2010. Overall, there was constant increase zoo’s tourist while a fall was seen festival’s traveller during the period. In addition, the volume of castle tourist cosistently highest figures and beside that traveller to aquarium has been decresing steadily throughout the period. The share of castle tourist roughly started at 25 percent after which it saw an increase until 1995, before declining gradually to the end the period. In reserve, the figure for tourist to festival downed around 5 percent in the final year. 10 percent of the amount of zoo tourist was taken trip in 1980 with continuous rise to 20 percent in 2010. Similarly, the figure for aquarium’s visitor was great upwardtrend to around 35 percent in the first five years but dropped gradually at the end of period
The line graph illustrates the proportion of
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who travelled aquarium, castle, zoo, festival in Edinburgh from 1980 to 2010.

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, there was constant increase zoo’s
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while a fall was
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festival’s
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traveller
during the period.
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, the volume of castle
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cosistently
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figures and beside that
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traveller
to aquarium has been
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decresing
steadily
throughout the period.

The share of castle
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roughly
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started
at 25
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percent
after which it
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saw
an increase until 1995,
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before
declining
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end
the period. In reserve, the figure for
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to festival downed around 5
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percent
in the final year.

10
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percent
of the amount of zoo
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tourist
was taken
trip in 1980 with continuous rise to 20
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percent
in 2010.
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, the figure for aquarium’s visitor was great
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upwardtrend
to around 35
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in the
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourist who travelled aquarium, castle, zoo, festival in Edinburgh from 1980 to 2010.

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