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The line graph illustrates the proportion of citizens in Chile by three different age groups including 0 to 14 years, 15 to 64 years and 65 years and older from 1975 to 2035.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of citizens in Chile by three different age groups including 0 to 14 years, 15 to 64 years and 65 years and older from 1975 to 2035. qR2b5
The line graph illustrates the proportion of citizens in Chile by three different age groups including 0 to 14 years, 15 to 64 years and 65 years and older from 1975 to 2035. Overall, it is clear that people from 15 to 64 years occupied the highest percentage over the period. While The oldest group has continuously grown, , the children group of below 14 years old has gradually decreased, and both trends are expected to continue in the future. Look at the graph more closely, one can see that in 1975, people of 65 years and over was at about 5%, then it nearly doubled in 2015, and it is anticipated to increase to around 15 percent in 2035. In contrast, The youngest group is forecast to go down constantly to just above 15% at the end of period after a plunge of approximately twenty percent from just above 40% in 1975 to around 20% in 2015 In terms of the group of 15-64 years, there was a great increase during the first 40 years from about 50% in 1975 to the peak seventy percent in 2015, but it is predicted to fall by 10% in the next 20 years.
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from 15 to 64 years occupied the highest percentage over the period. While The oldest
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above 40% in 1975 to around 20% in 2015

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of 15-64 years, there was a great increase during the
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the proportion of citizens in Chile by three different age groups including 0 to 14 years, 15 to 64 years and 65 years and older from 1975 to 2035.

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